January 26, 2009 @ 8:01 pm
You can have whatever you want as long as you can keep a secret-Part 1
Dear Readers: I’ve been writing short stories for a while. But I’ve been hesitant to post anything. But now that I’m self-hosting (yay, me), and I’ve given myself a break on having everything PERFECT immediately, I’m posting whatever I want. So here’s the 1st in what I hope is the beginning of regularly posted fiction.
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She spent too much time daily thinking about how easy it would be to cheat. In her mind it came down to 4 words.
Work.Call.Sex.Sleep
That’s what her life is reduced to.
What if her “other” wanted to cheat. It would be so easy for her.
Their uncomplicated routine gave an enterprising person lots of wiggle room for infidelity. Adding someone dumb and unsuspecting OR better yet, someone who only had sex in mind would be a piece of cake for either of them.
She sighed. It made her sad.
Work.Call.Sex.Sleep
As easy as that.
It was Friday night. She was glad she took those extra hours off from work today. It gave her a few extra minutes to see what her other was up to for the evening and, more importantly, to see how much time she had.
Work.Call
Talking to her other seemed so much earlier in the day. But now that she’d done her duty, she was free and the night was young.
She thought about that Amy Winehouse lyric. “It’s not cheating, ’cause you were on my mind.” And I thought about you when I came.”
She smiled and thought that truer words have never been spoken.
She closed her eyes, tried to forget her life.
She took a deep breath and grabbed the hands of the person she happened to bring home from that bar, and gave herself over to her release.
Work.Call.Sex.
Now she had figure out how to get them the hell out so she could get some sleep.
.Sleep.
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Posted by Susan Pogorzelski
January 26, 2009 @ 9:31 pm
Monica,
I’m so glad you’re back! I truly admire your courage to post your fiction and am so happy that you’re doing so, especially if it’s an important part of you.
Believe me, I know how much courage it takes to open up and put a piece of yourself out there — whether in a blog post, poetry, or a short story. This is a great step for you, and I’m excited to see where it will take you.
Onto your story: I really like the concept. Those four basic, primal needs, it seems, can also lead to the most vulnerable moments. I especially liked how you broke everything up — provided story as well as a bit of philosophy in your words.
Don’t be afraid to really go for it; the best thing about being a writer is that you can say anything (and edit it back later, if you choose). Try playing around with your language as well — experiment with language and imagery and see where it can take you. You’ve got something strong; now let it surprise you.
All the best wishes.